I need to edit my essay, turning it into a better version

Can you help me understand this English question?

I have made a rhetorical analysis essay about this speech and I need someone to edit it, add more information, and organize my writing. Not too much, I don’t want the instructor to notice the huge difference. Also, it is very important to add comments on minor changes and some notes about the mistakes I did.

speech: “2014 Darmouth Commencement Speech” by Shonda Rhimes


These are the requirements:

– For minor editing (rewording, fixing grammatical errors etc.), highlight the changes that you made.

– For major revisions (adding more information, reorganizing, integrating your thesis, etc.) use the comment feature on Google Docs to thoroughly and thoughtfully explain the changes that you have made.

– These changes and comments should be marked on your second draft of the essay.

Finally this was my teacher comment : Overall, you had a solid essay. You did have quite a few issues with your MLA formatting, so let me know if you have questions about that next time. You had a strong thesis and made some good points, but there were several areas where you made points but did not explain them enough. Overall, good job.

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